Saturday, 10 May 2014

Giving the Film a Story

The edit was at the stage where it could be handed over to Hannah for the start of the sound design process. I was really unhappy of the film as an overall piece due to its lack of story and progression. As I had tried over and over to get some sort of help from our director to solve these issues, I resorted to getting the edit to a stage where I was happy with the technical aspects. When handing the edit over to Hannah, she really wasn't happy with the lack of narrative so we spent an afternoon brain storming possible alternatives that we could do at this late a stage.

After meeting with Chris and going through a few possible options we decided on a Voice over to add an alternative layer and insentive for the story to progress. He mentioned in conversation about a Police officer and Hannah and I both liked this idea and initially started planning to add this to the film.

I spent the Evening, while Hannah had to go to work, researching police interviews and interrogations for wording and specific protocols that happen. I found some interview transcripts from a murder case and notices how the Police Officer seems to repeat a lot of what the interviewee says and gets them to reconfirm what they have just told him very regularly.

Kip Kinkel's Confession Transcript

Bruce Daniels Police Interview


Visually Hannah thought up the use of a cassette tape to symbolise the recording of the interview and showed me this video (link below) where they uses a film reel. I really like this as is brings your out of the story world into another location without even showing another location, almost putting the audience in a similar situation to the characters being in an unfamiliar location.

The Bureau - Video Game Trailer


When looking through some ideas I came across this video on youtube and I really like the part at 01:15. Throughout this piece they use the style of stop motion to create movement and I really like this part at 01:15 as this could be something similar that we could show in a scene of one of the characters going to the bathroom to take some drugs. This is a simple things to create as we could film with a steady cam and then in post I would create the jumps.



Another idea I thought up was to include a recap scene in which the police officer can go through the events that have been told so far in the style of Shaun on the Dead. I think this will add a slight breathing space in the story for the audience and will help add emphasis on the story that the police officer tells and what actually happens.



After doing this research I started to create a rough version of the Voice over script. I then went through all this with hannah showing her the other clips I found. At this stage we Skype called Alli to get her help with the script as she would be better at writing the characters answer as she was more familiar with they way of speaking from writing the initial script. Here is the a copy of the initial Voiceover Script that Me and Hannah created before going through it with Alli:

Initial Ideas

Play up until “Road Trip”
Freeze frame on Hugh
Police – hold on a Minute, can you say that again and clearer
Wooshh back to beginning
Isa (worried) – Well, Me and Rhian were just out on the balcony. She was having a cig and Hugh just turned up.
Police – He just turned up?
Continues playing normal, Rhian’s lines – What you doing here babe?
Hugh (over his part) – My auntie went away you see so I thought it’d be nice to go away for the weekend.
BLACK SCREEN
Police – Okay… so can you run me through when you picked up Lucas ……… …….?
Hugh – HAHAHA is that his middle name
Police – can you please just answer my question (repeats question).
Hugh – okay well once I had the girls we went straight there …
Starts playing half way through Hughs lines then cuts on Lukes HEEYYY line
Runs through scene till Rhians line “lets go then! Come on!”
Hugh – They didn’t realise Luke was able to come so was like a little surprise form them. They were excited sort of thing.
Police – repeat what Hugh says about the girls happy Lukes there.
Continues to play at Rhians line - I cant believe you invited him
Plays though till end of split screen.
Isa – talks through arriving, - add shots running in door
Luke – says bring loads and contributed
Plays out on Rhians line – Luke? What are you contributing to this trip?
BLACK SCREEN
Police ask about the night
Go through night scene
Isa say about went toilet and could hear Luke snoring but went back to sleep??
Police – okay .. lets go back a bit earlier on in the after noon  ….
Cuts to Luke telling story
Freezeframe as Rhian comes in saying look whats I’ve got.
Police question isa about the Nos?
Hellium
Continues to play out nos sequence
BLACK SCREEN
Police – The next day when you woke up what did you do?
Luke – When I got up everyone else was up outside having breakfast so went out and joined them …
Runs through scene in morning – wagwannn!!!
CUTS TO BLACK SCREEN AT END
 Police – asks about leaving girls
Isa – Explains going off
SHOWS GETTING DRUGS – POV – YOUTUBE
Police – Lets back up a second. Ask why they left?
Isa – Well, we were all just sitting in the kitchen …
Runs through scene
Police – So … says another version causing them to leave. (go shops or something)
Isa – Yeah that what happened.
Hand police sum up what happened so far – shaun of the dead style re cap …. So what happened next? We found remains of LSD in your possession. When did you take it?
Luke – Explains taking it no effects
Shots of in forest tripping
(got burned)
WHAT IS THAT??
Must be fake.
Montage
Planned to have BBQ so went to go find him

Shots of them shouting Luke?!



Here is an updated version once talking through with Alli on Skype to get her view on how the characters would word things:

VOICEOVER SCRIPT

Plays through film up until “Roadtrip”
Freeze frame on Hugh next to car
POLICE – Hold on. Say that again, clearer this time.
WOOSH rewind back to beginning
ISA– Well … Me and Rhian were just on the balcony … She was having Cig and then well Hugh turned up.
POLICE – He just turned up?
Continues scene until Rhian’s Line – What’s going on babe?
Hugh (over his part) – well my auntie had a free house … so I thought I’d take them there to chill out after exams.
BLACKSCREEN
POLICE (Over establishing shots of flats) – Okay … so can you run me through when you picked up a Lucas Gaylon Haywood
HUGH – Snigger. Is that is middle Name ….?
Cuts to WHEYYY
Runs through car scene up until Rhians Line – “Come on, lets go then”
HUGH – They didn’t realise Luke was coming … so … you know it was like a little surprise for them.
POLICE – so they were excited to see him?
Plays out scene, Rhian – I can’t believe you asked him to come.
POLICE – So .. How did you spend your evening at the cottage?
LUKE – Oh … was just a chilled evening … had a few beers/ had a cuppa
Clips of Luke and Isa
POLICE – so going back to that afternoon. did anything unusual happen?
ISA – oh no … not really
Shot Luke telling story
Rhian comes in – freeze frame
POLICE – oh so what was in the balloons?
ISA – Oh no its was just hellium …
POLICE – Right (doesn’t believe)
Carries on with scene
BLACKSCREEN
POLICE – The next day when you woke up what did you do?
LUKE – Went outside to see if anyone wanted a coffee.
Run through morning scene
BLACKSCREEN
POLICE – So where were you at 12 pm
HUGH – well … we were all just sitting in the kitchen …
RUN THROUGH SCENE
POLICE – So … you made pizza and played on the xbox?
HUGH – Yeah that’s right.
POLICE – You left the kitchen, where did you go?
ISA – oh, Rhian had a bath so I just watched TV in my room for a bit.
SHOTS OF COKE
POLICE RECAP –
 Shaun of the dead style - .so what happened next? We found evidence of LSD in your possession. Care to explain?
LUKE – stuttering – ermm well … yeah … no … no it was … erm … it wasn’t even real. I got ripped of. It didn’t even work …
SHOT OF TRIP
HUGH – We wanted a BBQ and he was taking ages so we thought we better go get him.
LOOKING FOR HIM SHOTS
POLICE – So how was the BBQ?
HUGH – Oh it was dark by the time we got back so didn’t bother
SOUND OF WHISPERING IN NIGHT SCENE – Rhian: “Well where did he go?” Hugh: “Fuck knows, how am I supposed to know?” Rhian: “It’s not like we can ask him, he was that off his head he won’t remember.”
SHOT OF ISA GOING IN LUKES ROOM
TIME LAPSE OF SUNRISE
POLICEMAN – And at what time did you leave the cottage?
ISA – About midday…
SHOTS OF CAR DRIVING (CLOUDY DAY) – DIEGETIC RADIO SOUND
CUT TO BLACK
FADE IN TAPE DECK (WITH RADIO CONTINUED AND TAPE CLICKING ADDED)
SOUND OF RADIO FADE OUT AND JUST HAVE CLICKING
HUGH – Sorry… How long’s this gonna take? Visiting time’s nearly over and I need to go see Rhian/my girlfriend…
CUT TO BLACK – TAPE REWINDS
CREDITS ROLL – TRANSCRIPT STYLE (TONAL SOUND PIECE INFLUENCED WITH CAR CRASH)

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